Time flies by so quick,it’s already time for the second essay. It looks like I did well for the second essay, at least that’s what I thought. After submitting my essay online, I was eagerly waiting for comments by my group-mates. After a long time , I didn’t receive anything , I actually thought I wrote the essay so well that it doesn’t need editing, this was a huge ego boost but around an hour before the deadline, i got an email from Miss Sarah saying that no one could comment on my link, the site did now allow comments to be posted, she was quick enough to quickly fix it. Hardly, a few minutes passed and I was flooded with comments, in one way I was sad thinking that my essay was not the perfect essay but in the other way, it actually helps me excel in my work before submitting it to Miss Sarah.

In reality, I need to work on every aspect of my essay, I have a major problem with placing comma in their appropriate places as you can see in this journal. Another thing, I realized is I shift in person, that is from first person to second person very quickly. Instead of using a coordinating conjunction I use commas which is not a great idea This has to stop now or I won’t be able to get a good grade. I’m still working on these mistakes and will prove to be a better writer by the end of this class.